The Official Writing Challenge
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02/26/10
I could feel the girls' anxiety -and I love the way they kept praying. Very nice.
02/27/10
You built tension in a very credible way. As was the childrens' prayers. Nice story.
This is a great children's story. Remember to start a new paragraph when someone new is speaking. there's some missing punctuation too, but that is easily fixed. I'm so glad the dog was smart enough to get Mom.
03/02/10
This is a precious children's story.