The Official Writing Challenge
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Bummer. I just found at least two mistakes I would have fixed if I had proof read a 12th time!
Don't beat yourself up. There is always the next challenge. I have done the same thing when submitting in a hurry. The story was good.
Great job painting the picture of a productive servant of God, and a couple who are comfortable and content in their marriage. You grabbed my attention immediately by opening with a quote, and then developed the story nicely with good pacing. What a surprise ending! Amazing this man was able to continue functioning so well with multiple embolisms! The errors you mentioned are just punctuation misses, nothing major. Good job!