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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Ohhh…. (02/04/10)

TITLE: Where is God?
By Carol Cook
02/08/10


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It was beautiful! After months of sawdust, mess and confusion, the new addition was finally finished and our home looked so nice. Our little girl’s new bedroom was enchanting with all of the ruffles, lace and especially the storage area for all of her toys.

What was even more exciting was the addition of a new library. For years I had dreamed of a room where I could sit and be surrounded by books. I couldn’t believe it was really here. When I had told the carpenters how many shelves I wanted they looked at me with a question in their eyes and said, “That will hold a lot of books.” I had a lot of books.

After the sawdust was cleaned, the curtains were hung and the books were placed on the shelves, my daughter and I retired to the library for a well-deserved story time. We sat in the big, comfortable, overstuffed chair preparing for the story, but she had some very important questions, first.

“Mommy, is God in our new house?”
“Yes, God is in our house,” I told her.
“Is He in my new room?”
“Yes.”
“Is He here, in the new library?”
“Of course. God is everywhere,” I explained.
“Is He in the closet?”
“Ye-es, He’s in the closet,” I replied wondering where this conversation was going.
“What’s He doing in the closet?”


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AnneRene' Capp 02/11/10
Ahhh, the "thinkings" of a child! Precious.
Rikki Akeo02/12/10
This is precious!
Verna Mull02/13/10
Hey, I still wonder where the conversation went?
Marita Vandertogt02/14/10
I think only half of your story came through - unless the "ohh" comes from the reader. Otherwise, well written to where it ends.
Marita Vandertogt02/14/10
Actually, now that I read it again, it's quite funny... cute!
Michael Joshua02/15/10
Cute story - I can hear one of my grandkids having this conversation.
Tessy Fuller02/16/10
That made me laugh! It is much better for God to be in the closet then monsters, that is for sure!
Jan Ackerson 02/16/10
This one made me grin...precious.

In the section of dialog at the end, there should be a blank line after each speaker's bit of conversation, even though they are very short.

I loved your punchline.