The Official Writing Challenge
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Ahhh, the "thinkings" of a child! Precious.
02/12/10
This is precious!
02/13/10
Hey, I still wonder where the conversation went?
I think only half of your story came through - unless the "ohh" comes from the reader. Otherwise, well written to where it ends.
Actually, now that I read it again, it's quite funny... cute!
Cute story - I can hear one of my grandkids having this conversation.
02/16/10
That made me laugh! It is much better for God to be in the closet then monsters, that is for sure!
02/16/10
This one made me grin...precious.

In the section of dialog at the end, there should be a blank line after each speaker's bit of conversation, even though they are very short.

I loved your punchline.