The Official Writing Challenge
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Amazing how God uses the little things to touch our hearts. Thanks for sharing!
09/07/05
A sweet story of comfort and hope. Work on punctuation of dialog, and separating your paragraphs.
09/08/05
I was so touched by your story. It held my interest throughout. Glad that you found that Amazing Grace.
thank you for a touching story--a perfect example of how we plant seeds every day of our life.
09/20/05
Kelli, this was a very nice story and had a wonderful, uplifting ending. Some suggestions for tweaking it - break up your paragraphs a little more. Every time there's a change in the thought, direction or action, it's time to start a new paragraph. Also, with speech, make sure that you start a new paragraph every time someone new is speaking or thinking. It all helps to improve the flow for the reader. But be encouraged. It was a good entry and actually rated quite well with the Level 1 Judges. With love, Deb (Challenge Coordinator)