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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Ohhh…. (02/04/10)

TITLE: One of those moments...
By Debbie Lake


I cannot believe she just said that. I look up for my husband and see he conveniently has disappeared around the front of the building,anxious to escape to annonimity inside the resturant. He must have heard her,and his hasty exit with the other children means there is no chance he is going to handle this one…. “I’m so sorry” I mutter, unable to even look at them, and hustle my daughter off to catch up with the rest of the family.

Victoria, our 6 year old daughter, has never been anything resembling shy, so after being the first one out of the van, it wasn’t shocking to us that as we were unloading the rest of the children, she began sashaying towards a family that was exiting the Steak and Ale. She was fresh from church, all dressed up in her Sunday best, lavender sundress complete with crinolines and a bow in her curly hair… she gravitated towards the matriarch of the family, clearly quite elderly and leaning on a walker for a rest every few steps. The woman looked up and smiled sweetly at my daughter and complimented her on her dress. Victoria twirled for good measure and practically curtsied to the woman behind the walker. The rest of the woman’s family began to chime in and asked her what her name was and gushed over her. Victoria answered succinctly but kept her gaze on the woman in the walker. “What a sweet child,” I thought to myself. She is our family’s token extrovert, and never ceases to amaze us by displaying what the word “outgoing” actually means. I would have hustled the children into the restaurant, anxious to get them all seated and settled. I likely wouldn’t have stopped to chat with people I didn’t know. She took the time to engage an elderly woman who was clearly enjoying seeing and chatting with her. “A little child shall lead them” and all the related platitudes ran through my mind. Motherly pride in my lavender clad daughter welled up as I watched the little conversation unfold. Just as I began over to retrieve her and excuse ourselves to go join the rest of the family, my stomach dropped and I could hardly believe my ears… my darling has just sweetly inquired of the woman “Are you almost dead?”

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AnneRene' Capp02/11/10
Cute and Ohhh so familiar!
Sharon Laughter02/11/10
I love this - everyone has those "out of the mouth of babes" stories, but this was golden. Your descriptions were excellent - I felt like I was there. Didn't know how you were going to make the topic work, but I think it became self-explanatory at the end. Good Job!
Verna Mull 02/12/10

"Out of the mouth of babes!" Very well done article! I'm sure the woman got a real kick out of that question. Kids are so honest in what they say. Sometimes we adults could take a good lesson. if you tell the truth about what you say, you don't have to remember what you said! (At 78 years of age, that is a great statement, as it becomes harder and harder to remember! :) Great job!
Dana McReynolds02/14/10
Very funny story!
Mark Bell02/16/10
kids do say the darndest things, don't they? precious honesty in this. thanks for sharing.
Jan Ackerson 02/16/10

Well-written, too. My only suggestion would be to break it into several smaller paragraphs.

I wanted to read more and more! Great buildup to the kicker at the end.
Jackie Wilson02/17/10
What a surprise twist at the ending. And so typical of how our children say unexpected things. Thanks for a fun read!