The Official Writing Challenge
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Very interesting, but I would have liked to know more of her progress before the girls came. Not just sure what it is, but it left me just a little "empty" in the abrupt ending. Keep writing, you had some great thoughts. After all, this is just one poor writers opinion! :)
Spacing between paragraphs would make reading your story easier.

It's a cute story and the main character's personality really shines through. I would recommend that you have someone read over it before posting. There were a few small errors in the piece.

I liked the ending in that it surprised me a bit. I had no idea that the special day was her own birthday. Very cute.
I find myself becoming more and more like Mrs. Tiddlesworth...oh, dear.

I'd like a bit more clarity as to time and place. And note the correct spelling of 'lavender' (one of my favorite colors!)

This is quaint and charming.