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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Ohhh…. (02/04/10)

TITLE: Don't Go There!
By Holly Hoell
02/06/10


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Sally awoke in a hospital room. Right away, she smelled a heavy odor of Pine Sol. As her vision cleared, she found that she was dressed in a dingy while hospital gown and on her arm was a cast. Her foot was wrapped in a bandage, where a cut and resulting blood clot had been taken care of. This was all due to a tumble down a flight of hard wooden stairs at her house.

She sat up and looked around. There was a girl in the bed next to her. She looked like she was about Sally's age, 7 maybe 8. Sally asked her what her name was, “Emily”, she replied. Emily had short brown hair and glasses. She seemed nice and friendly. They talked a little. It was boring in the hospital, there wasn't much for the girls to do while stuck in bed.

During the day, nurses came in and out of the room; they would appease Sally and Emily by replying to them with words like “wow” and “oh really”, like they were interested in what the girls were saying to them as they carried out their work. Sally's parents came and visited for a while and brought some candy. But they couldn’t stay long as they had to get back to the farm to finish all the chores that awaited them.

As the day went on, something happened that Sally would never forget. Two nurses came in and drew the curtain around Emily's bed. Sally could see shadows behind the curtain and there was a place in the center where the curtain didn't quite meet. Through that gap, Sally could kind of see what was going on. She heard them tell Emily it was time for her enema.

Sally didn't know what that was, but did observe some of what the nurses were up to through the opening in the curtain. What are they doing? That is gross! Sally was bewildered as she witnessed the disturbing scene in the bed next to her. When they completed the "procedure" the nurse told Emily "Now Emily, let us know next time you have to go to the bathroom".

As a child, you think about monsters in the closet or the boogie man outside the window. Part of a young girl’s fears would not typically be a nurse looking to do an enema on her. But never the less the words of the nurse echoed in Sally's ears. "Let me know next time you have to go to the bathroom".

Yeah right? Let her know? From that moment on, the very top priority for Sally would be to never let a nurse think she had to go to the bathroom. If that is what happens when you tell a nurse you have to go to the bathroom; Sally wanted no part of it!

Sally began to think of ways she could sneak into the bathroom unnoticed, but the opportunity never presented its self. Unfortunately because the fear of the enema loomed over her, Sally held her bladder as long as she could that evening. She finally fell asleep even though she was uncomfortable. The next morning Sally woke up feeling a little cold and wet. The wet bed was ok though, because it was much better than the alternative!

When Sally’s mom and dad came to take her home, she heard the nurse say to them, "The only thing is; she hasn't gone to the bathroom for some time." As Sally left the hospital with her parents, she was very happy and proud of herself. She had managed to escape the enema. She would now be safe!


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Delores McCarter02/11/10
Cute story, but I didn't see effective use of the assigned word. Just a thought for the next time. Happy writing.
Verna Mull 02/12/10
It was a cute story. I can see "Ohhh!" applied, if it isn't actually stated. I enjoyed the story!
Jan Ackerson 02/16/10
A very squirmy story!

I'm not sure who the intended audience is--it seems to be written for children, but do children want a story about enemas?

Great pun in the title--I always love a good play on words.