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01/31/10
You do very well at capturing the complexity of the mother/teen-daughter relationship and the hurt that it can cause. I'm just starting that journey myself and could relate well to your story!
01/31/10
Emjoyed your story. Good flow and good treatment of the subject.
02/01/10
Every mother who's ever had a sullen adolescent daughter will relate to this!

Love your title.
02/01/10
I like your title, also, and the symbolism it portrays. This is a well-thought out story and relevant for today's "family." I enjoyed their use of technology to communicate.
I am so glad that the daughter texted her mom and smoothed things out. You might want to remember to start new paragraphs with a new speaker. Great story!
They say texting is the next best thing to talking. (Don't they?)
02/01/10
Great mother-daughter relationship. Nicely done.
02/02/10
Strong emotions. I could just feel the tension as Mom emptied the trash from her tray....nice moments of reconciliation!
02/02/10
The emotion in this story felt very real. I'm glad technology could bridge the gap between this mother and daughter. Good job portraying a complex and realistic relationship!
02/02/10
Ahh the modern family! At least they connected. God can use those texts too! Very well done.
02/03/10
Sometimes we don't realize how a single comment, even a joking one, can hurt someone deeply. And just as easily, a small act of kindness or reconsiliation can mean more than we know.
This is a great story and I love the mom's way of telling it. My favorite part is where she says she thought Liv would get whiplash from flipping her hair so hard. :D
02/03/10
Fantastic title, great atmosphere. Loved the line about Liv giving herself whiplash from flipping her hair, lol. Very realistic story. Good job!
Oh dear, is this what I have to look forward too?

Thank you for writing about an experience that many moms of teens have. You wrote tenderly and with much emotion.