The Official Writing Challenge
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I like the way you portrayed the "human element" in all of us. So easy to lift our own spirits up at the hope of "easy" but brought yourself, son and the reader back to the word!
02/01/10
I like the ironic humor in the first paragraph.

Suggestions: break your longer paragraphs into shorter chunks, and avoid exclamation points except in dialog.

Blessings on you as you seek the best for your son.
I liked how you turned a rumor into a meaningful Bible lesson. Good job.
02/02/10
I liked the way the mom teaches patiently. Sometimes we just need to do those things we put off because after all we don't know the day nor the hour.Well done.
02/05/10
A great reminder that we can never know when the Lord is returning, and that it's important to stay in the Word if we are to defend what we believe. The end paragraph is my favorite.