The Official Writing Challenge
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09/05/05
I am a pretty tough guy and a former United States Marine and I defy ANYBODY not to get "misty eyed" reading your beautiful story. From the description of you and your brother arguing over the cereal box to the postcard fluttering to the floor to the final line of an occasional tear running down your cheek, it was beautifully written.

Pauly
09/05/05
I agree with Paul, a very touching entry. I too liked the reference to the fight over who got to read which side of the cereal box. Brings back memories. How many moms will begin to share this kind of legacy with their children because of your words? Very good!!
09/05/05
Beautiful, touching story! You really captured real moments - one people can identify with. MY kids fight over which side of the cereal box they read. Super job! A shining first entry in the challenge!
09/05/05
A lovely story! Very real and personal.
09/05/05
Very powerful piece. It brought tears to my eyes. Thanks for sharing it.
09/06/05
A truly touching story that brought tears to my eyes too. Your parents passed on a beautiful legacy.
09/06/05
This piece is an achingly sweet story of the legacy of love.
A sweet and sad story. Well done. Thanks for sharing!
09/07/05
Very, very lovely. Consdier moving up a level; this is beyond Beginners' work.
09/08/05
Wonderful piece! You definitely need to bump up to intermediate.
09/09/05
Really really good. The tears are close. God Bless, Karen
Congrats dear! Great job! Blessings, Amy
I have a lump in my throat. So beautiful. God bless.
09/20/05
Julie, I'm only just getting a chance to pop around and leave some feedback on the Postcard entries, but wanted to make a point of saying, "Well Done!" on your 3rd place Level 1 win. It was well deserved, and believe me, you weren't all that far off making it into the Editors' Choice. The competition and standard of Level 1 entries during the Postcards Challenge, was very high - and you were definitely up there with the best of them. I was judging Level 1 for this particular week, and the only comment I wrote next to your entry was, "Quite lovely." It really was, and I encourage you to keep writing and rising to the Challenge! With love, Deb (Challenge Coordinator)