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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Huh? (01/21/10)

TITLE: What Just Happened Here?
By Barbara Lynn Culler
01/25/10


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Overheard at a restaurant; a conversation by a couple of Twenty-Somethings. “She” is in the booth directly behind me.

She: “Oh sweetheart, I just love you so much!”

He: “I know. I love you too, darling. What are you going to get?”

She: “Under her breath: married? I don’t know yet, I have been too distracted watching your handsome face.”

He: “I think I’ll have the pot roast dinner. I’m extra hungry tonight.”

She: “Sounds good! I think I might have the oriental chicken salad. It comes with a side of bread. I love the bread here almost as much as I love you!”

He: “Salad is good. Love you too.


(Waiter comes and takes order)


He:” So, since it is your turn to choose the movie for tonight, what are we going to see?”

She: “That new one that they advertise all the time on TV-Where the world makes your heart grow fonder”

He: “What a dumb name! What’s it about?”

She: “What do you mean, ‘dumb’? I think it’s a cool name. What do you know about names anyway- After naming your dog Fido! Boring!”

He: “Now sweetheart….”

She: “Don’t patronize me! I hate it when you talk down to me”

He: “But I…”

She: “STOP!”

He: “Shh … everybody’s looking at us!”

She: “I DON’T CARE! You make me so mad!”


(Silence for several minutes, then the waiter brings the food)


She: “Oh, this looks delicious!”

He: “MMMM umm“

She: “I love you darling”

He: “Love you too, sweetheart. ‘Kiss kiss’ ”


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Marie Fink01/28/10
Love is blind I suppose. Well told and certainly a
Huh?' moment.
Jan Ackerson 02/01/10
Overheard conversations can be fascinating, can't they?

When writing in 'play' format, quotation marks are not needed, and actions should be put in parenthesis. Here's a brief sample:

She: Oh sweetheart, I just love you so much!

He: I know. I love you too, darling. What are you going to get?

She: (muttering under her breath) Married? (aloud) I don’t know yet, I have been too distracted watching your handsome face.

He: I think I’ll have the pot roast dinner. I’m extra hungry tonight.


I'd sure like to hear more of this conversation--but I'm thinking that maybe marriage isn't the best idea for them, yet!
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 02/01/10
Sometimes you want to just get up and leave! You did a good job of describing an embarrassing scene. It made me stop and think, a reminder that I never know when I might be overheard.
Ruth Brown 02/02/10
Definitely a Huh? moment. Cute piece.
Jackie Wilson02/03/10
A fun read!


   
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