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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Huh? (01/21/10)

TITLE: Caught Off Guard
By Lisha Hunnicutt
01/25/10


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The following is a bit off-color, but is in fact a true story. When I read the prompt, "Huh?" this story was the first to pop in my mind and it's taken a firm grip there. So, here goes....



"Okay girls, it's time to go," I said. "I'm headed to the car. Get a move on."

This was part of our great getting-ready-for-school ritual, and this day was no different. I pushed, pushed, pushed in order to get my two elementary aged daughters out the door by 7:30, which invariably stretched to 7:40. "I can't be late," I said. "I'm the teacher!"

We were finally packed in the car, lunches in tow, and headed off to school. "Let's see," I thought. "We've got P.E. first thing this morning, but I need to run copies of the math quiz. It'd be good if I grabbed the foam balls on the way back to class. It'd save us some time on PE set-up. We'll need extra math time in order to get the quiz and today's lesson done." I continued thinking through the beginning-of-the-day tasks for that morning when my 9 year old daughter interrupted my thoughts.

"Hey Mommy, wouldn't it be cool if humans had balls?" she asked.

"Huh?" I choke. The feeling of shock slammed into my chest. I asked myself, "Did she just say what I think she said?"

"Wouldn't it be cool if humans had balls?" she repeated.

"What?" I screech. "What do you mean?"

"You know, like Rhino," she says.

"Rhino?" I stammered in confusion.

"Yeah, Rhino, the hamster in the movie "Bolt". He goes all over the place in that little plastic ball. Wouldn't it be cool if humans had big plastic balls like that?" she explains. "We could go all over the place. It would be so cool!"

"Ooh, that would be cool," piped in my second born.

As the I-can't-believe-I-just-heard-that shock begins to wear off, I burst into gut-wrenching laughter. My view of the road became blurred by the tears springing out of my eyes. I couldn't help it.

"What's so funny?" she asked and began to giggle as my infectious laughter spread to her and then on to her sister.

I was laughing so hard that I couldn't answer her. Between gasps I said, "I'll tell you in a minute."

Several minutes later, I finally caught my breath and candidly explained why that was not the best way to phrase her question. I was a bit sad that some of my daughters' innocence was lost that day, but I wanted to protect her from the embarrassment that might result from that kind of question being asked in class. It's hard to be prepared for everything that a child might throw at me, and this one certainly caught me off guard. You know, children should come with manufacturers labels attached: Warning! Sense of humor required!


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Marita Vandertogt01/28/10
I love the way this was written...nice humourous conversational flow - easy to read and fun to enjoy...not to mention a tad embarrasing, but hey. I enjoyed this...
Marie Fink01/28/10
A well told account of teachable moments in a family. It would be fun to be around when your daughter has her lightbulb moment in the future about it all.
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 01/29/10
That was a great story. I had a very similar incident with my daughter. I appreciate the humor and the fun way you told the story. Kids will say the darnedest things!
Jan Ackerson 02/01/10
Love these funny family moments!

I'd leave off the disclaimer at the beginning--you don't want to start off you story with an apology for it, and it's best not to refer to the prompt. Just tell your story!
Ruth Brown 02/02/10
Gotta love the voice of babes!
Lyn Churchyard02/06/10
LOL what a great HUH? moment. Incidents like that are enough to make a Mom swallow her tongue. With kids, life is full of moments like that. Nothing wrong with your content, just full of childhood innocence.