The Official Writing Challenge
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09/05/05
Precious poem of a timely subject. If you devide into stanzas, it makes it easier for the reader. Other then that, it is well written with much love. Something I enjoy seeing in a poem. "Nicely Done" "God Bless You"
09/05/05
I agree that you should separate your stanzas, but a very timely poem. Good job.
09/05/05
Timely subject treatment in this lovely poem. I like the rhythm too.
09/06/05
Much heart and feeling went into this piece. Keep writing from your heart.
Such brave young men and women choose to fight a war not-their-own. Loved this piece. Thanks for sharing!
09/07/05
Very rich in feeling and meaning, excellent rhyme. Work on more consistent meter (the same number of accented and unaccented syllables in each line).
09/10/05
I purely just loved it. Beautifully written. Finding a way to represent many moms and dads who are longing to hear a word from their children..well--I think this poem portrays the story in a very heartfelt manner. Nice job! God bless ya, littlelight