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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Huh? (01/21/10)

TITLE: What Are You Concentrating On?
By bobbi richardson
01/22/10


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A young man sits in front of a large screen TV. His feet propped comfortably on an ottoman. A joystick gripped in his hands.

The screen flickers with movement and the young man's fingers move furiously over the various buttons and controls.

He vaguely senses movement around him, but continues to concentrate on the action in front of him. He hears voices, but in his state of concentration they sound like Charlie Brown's teacher so he ignores them.

At the end of a round of play he rejoices over advancing to the next round, feeling superior that he won.

He looks around quickly as the game readies itself for another onslaught. Something is happening, but the TV beacons and soon he's deeply engaged in the more impelling action on the screen.

Time passes and the young man advances round after round. With each conquest of a round his celebration becomes more and more exuberant.

It's now getting harder to advance and the young man leans forward almost as if he would gain an advantage if he could physically enter into the action.

Finally, his skill cannot match the game's and he is faced with the ultimate let-down "Game Over".

As the young man looks around he becomes aware that it is dark and he is alone.

Had he been that involved in the game?

He wanders from room to room looking for anyone.

Propped on the kitchen table is a note:

"Tried to get your attention but you were too into that game.

Went to dinner and a movie. Back later. Love you."

Huh?

Sometimes we are like that with God. He wants to spend time with us, but we're too into something else so we miss out.

What are you concentrating on?


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Sarah Heywood01/28/10
Oh, that's good! I could identify with the action in the story because I have sons that really get into their video gaming with great intensity. "Ouch!" would also be a good title for this one!
Mary Knoll Santos01/28/10
Wonderful message. A wake-up call! May God find me (and my young ones) faithful and obedient to His voice daily. Thanks for your entry.
Blessings to many more writing endeavors for His glory!
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 01/29/10
You did a wonderful job. Thank you for your insight and gentle reminder that God should come first.
Jan Ackerson 02/01/10
Excellent object lesson!

A small detail: A 'beacon' is a warning light. I think you wanted 'beckon'--to call out to.

This would be a great conversation starter for a teen group.
Lollie Hofer 02/01/10
I liked the scene you set here, felt like I was reading a script from a movie. Good lesson for all of us.
Janice Fitzpatrick02/02/10
Oh, this is so relateable for all of us. Whether it's a video game, television, Facebook, grin, or some other distraction, most of us have found ourselves so absorbed that we miss out on time with our "Father."
I can see this as a skit or reworked into a devotion. Great message.
Ruth Brown 02/02/10
Excellent point. Well done.
Pam Ford Davis 02/04/10
Valuable lesson! Loved the comment about Charlie Brown!