The Official Writing Challenge
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09/05/05
Interesting account and history of the postcard and you've managed to tie the written message of the postcard with that of the Bible for authenticity.
09/06/05
Very interesting and well done!
Great spin on a hard topic! Good job!
09/07/05
Very interesting article.
09/07/05
I'd have liked to have seen a transitional paragraph between the "postcard" section of this essay and the "Bible" section. You made the connection, but not until the end. And it was a great connection!
09/20/05
Hi Norma. I'm just getting a chance to pop around and leave feedback on some of the postcard entries. I was judging Level 1 that week and did enjoy your entry, but Jan's comment was quite right. There needed to be something to bridge the piece about postcards (which I found very interesting) and the Bible section. For the reader, it was a little like swapping tracks halfway through a journey. One of the areas we rate is on how well an entry flows from start to finish, so that lack of a bridge in the middle was what let your piece down. I really hope you'll keep rising to the Challenge though. You had a great message to share and I'll look forward to reading more from you in the future. With love, Deb (Challenge Coordinator)