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I love it. I did the same thing once.
Shann
01/22/10
Yes, that is an Oops. LOL. I know those kind of moments and the dreaded awkward pause when you discover you are the only one laughing. Good short story. the title fits.
01/25/10
Great story! Definitely made me laugh.

A quick suggestion--instead of telling this narrative style, tell it like a story with the conversation between you and the young man. It might have even more impact that way.

I've started a thread in the message boards specifically for Beginner and Intermediate writers, and I'd love to have you stop by. http://www.faithwriters.com/Boards/phpBB2/viewforum.php?f=67

This was a nice grin in my morning of reading--thanks!
02/08/10
Have just read this AnneRene! Brilliant and very well written. Reminds me of the time when my waitress-aunt offered a customer Lemon Turd Cart!
03/09/10
Holly this is a very insightful and wonderful story.

There have been many Freudian slips in my past conservations that made me cringe and want to immediately disappear.

Great Job and thanks for sharing this funny story with me.