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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Oops (01/14/10)

TITLE: Choose Carefully
By Michelle Knoll
01/15/10


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The wonderful thing about "oops,"
It can get you quite out of a jam,
When you've made a mistake
Or something you did break,
Then that one word can be like a lam!

Though some times this word is not good,
And some never this word should they use.
For their tasks are too great
And disaster their fate
And their jobs they could possibly lose!

A dentist who fixes your teeth,
While you sit there all comfortably numb,
Wouldn't have his job long
If this word was his song,
'Cause you'd think he was really quite dumb!

A surgeon who opens you up,
If his fingers did suddenly twitch
And this word he did say,
He most surely would pay,
For there's some things you just cannot stitch!

A lawyer who stands at the bench,
Who defends you in trial and suit,
If HE said this word,
You would think him absurd,
For his other points then would be moot.

So "oops" can be fine, yes, for some,
But for others a problem quite sore.
So depending your lot
And the job that you've got,
You should choose to speak less and not more!


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Verna Mull 01/21/10
Very cute! I loved it.
Sara Harricharan 01/21/10
Interestingly written, a tad rough in a few patches, but the touch of humor helps to bring it out with some imagery, etc. A good short piece, thank you for sharing this! (and the title fits well)
Jean Beier01/23/10
I enjoyed this work of yours. It made me laugh but also take pause. I have surgery coming up, and I hope the surgeon does not make an Oops! Keep writing for Jesus.
AnneRene' Capp 01/24/10
Very creative. I was tickled about the Dentist beacause I was the assistant who did actually say "oops" during a surgical procedure. It NEVER happened again. :)
Jan Ackerson 01/25/10
I love that the structure of each stanza was limerick-like...this is something we don't often see for Challenge entries, and quite refreshing.
Dr. Sharon Schuetz01/26/10
This was wonderful. A couple of rough spots in structure, but the message was amazing. I love the creativity and the laugh it gave me.
Dr. Sharon Schuetz01/26/10
This was wonderful. A couple of rough spots in structure, but the message was amazing. I love the creativity and the laugh it gave me.
Dr. Sharon Schuetz01/26/10
This was wonderful. A couple of rough spots in structure, but the message was amazing. I love the creativity and the laugh it gave me.
Dr. Sharon Schuetz01/26/10
This was wonderful. A couple of rough spots in structure, but the message was amazing. I love the creativity and the laugh it gave me.
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 01/26/10
The rhythm seems to come with ease. I enjoy writing poems but i'm not very good with meter. You've managed it quite nicely.
Patricia Herchenroether01/26/10
Really cute. Metre needs a little work, but a very creative way to approach the topic. Good entry.