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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: It's a Colorful World (12/03/09)

TITLE: Enraptured Imagery
By Barbara Lynn Culler
12/09/09


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Languishing alone at the beach,
Watching the rising tide;
My Imagination took me
For a colorful ride

I found myself in a meadow
Daisies, yellow and white
Swaying in the summer breeze
Lifting, three feet in height

Up above the blooming pasture,
Hovered a red-orange sphere
Surrounded by a pink and gold sky,
I was uplifted with cheer

Flittering around the heavens
Then resting on a cloud
I heard an angelic choir
Sing praisingly and loud

There was scarlet and green confetti
Floating in the sapphire sky
I saw dozens of tiny rainbows
Swirling up ever so high

I felt at peace, and joy was full
The calm lulled me to sleep
I then awoke back on the beach
The air cold, the night deep

I did not want to go away
I said I’d return tomorrow
To imagine my hope for joy
And to forget my sorrow


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Jan Ackerson 12/11/09
A sweet and happy poem!

Just a few tweaks of the rhythm and meter would really polish this up.

You chose a great title for this rich-in-imagery poem.
Colin Swann12/14/09
I enjoyed this bright colourful poem. One of the masters will help you out on meter (most of us have problems with it) someone like Jan who has a writing class on the notice board - she is dealing with poetry presently.
Well done Barbara!
Colin
Verna Cole Mitchell 12/14/09
Your poem has lovely imagery.
For meter suggestions: lines one and three in a four-line poem need to have the same number of syllables and have stresses (accents) the same--as do lines two and four. If you use couplets, they need to have same number of syllables and have stresses the same.
Example:
I languished alone at the beach,
To watch the rising tide;
Imagination carried me
Through colors on a ride.
(Some words don't fall into meter easily--like colorful).

I flitted round the heavens
And rested on a cloud
To hear angelic choirs
Sing praisingly and loud.
Beth LaBuff 12/14/09
Meter--the bane of the poet. :) Every poet struggles with meter. Verna has some good suggestions. Don't give up! You have talent. The images of your poem and are very good.


   
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