The Official Writing Challenge
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I like the way you ended your story.

The story seemed to wander a bit. You included lots of nice descriptions but I'm not sure some were pertinent to the story. I'd like to know more about why she was going back to school late. More dialogue, maybe with the pastor would spice this up. This is nice writing though. Please keep doing it.