The Official Writing Challenge
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12/01/09
Nice descriptions with great detail. I was a little confused when you said you needed help, since the man in the BMW was already helping. It's great how God always provides.
12/01/09
Awww, good story! Lots of potential.

I would love to see some dialogue, especially between the rude man who closed the door on your MC ("Whatever lady.") I found dialogue can really spice up an entry and draw the reader in...at least that's what I'm learning.

Great title, fit this entry well. Keep writing!
12/04/09
Great descriptions! I couldn't wait to see what happened next!
02/19/10
Your writing is so readable, with a "You are there!" quality. Well done, Barb!
This is fantastic details and writing Barb. I love how help appeared when you prayed. This is great.