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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Luggage (08/15/05)

TITLE: The Luggage of the Pharisee and the Tax Collector
By Julianne Jones
08/19/05


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Luggage, please sir!

Finest Italian leather,
Hand rubbed and trimmed with gold.
Only the best entrusted
His offering of gifts to hold.
Deceitfulness.
Pride.
Arrogance and jealousy.
These are his gifts to hold.

Have you anything to declare, sir?

He likes to wear his linen robes,
Hand embroidered, fine as lace.
Head high, strutting proudly,
He makes sure they know his place.
Selfishness.
Lies.
Stubbornness, adultery.
He makes sure they know his place.

Anything else to declare, sir?

He stands in the public square,
Voice upraised amongst the din.
Face toward heaven, arms open wide
And no one knows he hides his sin.
Anger.
Injustice.
Stealing and hatred.
And no one knows he hides his sin.

Luggage, please sir!

Plain and common and dirty;
Held together with string.
It is all he has to carry -
These are his gifts for the King.
Humility.
Honor.
Love and service.
These are his gifts for the King.

Have you anything to declare, sir?

Robes that declare a lowly status,
Tattered and worn and thin.
They are but cheap and badly sewn,
No covering for his sin.
Forgiving.
Thankful.
Showing mercy.
No covering for his sin.

Anything else to declare, sir?

He chooses carefully and tries to hide;
Clasps his hands and bows his head.
A saddened and a humbled heart -
He feels his place is with the dead.
Honest.
Generous.
Faithful and true.
He feels his place is with the dead.

Walk on through, sir.

Your gifts are all that the King requires:
A humble and contrite heart.
Your robes are the robes of righteousness -
His love now fills your heart.
By His blood
Now justified.
Forgiveness for your sin.
All that He requires is a willing, obedient heart.

These are your gifts for the King.


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Debra Bowers08/23/05
Very special entry on this weeks subject. "Beautifully Written"
Shonnah McGrew08/24/05
This is great. I am studying about this in my Sunday School lesson this week and I tell you, with your writing you hit said all the things that I have been studying about this is awesome.
Debra Brand08/25/05
Love it! Great teaching and good writing!
Tammy Johnson08/25/05
Beautiful job! And nice take on luggage. Excellent way to remind us and show us all packaged up this wonderful parable.
Crista Darr08/25/05
This is really good! I hope to see you in the winner's circle! Great work!
Theresa Kissinger08/26/05
This reminded me of the Pharisee and the publican, and I love this poem. In fact I think I'll study your smithing. Very well written.
Theresa Kissinger08/26/05
Duh...I really did read the title. That is how quickly I had forgotten. Senior moment! Sorry.
Suzanne R08/28/05
Brilliant! I love the content, the concept, the repetition of key lines, the rhythm ... in short, everything about it! WELL DONE!
darlene hight08/28/05
Loved the creative approach to the topic.
Shari Armstrong 08/29/05
A well written piece -good constrast!
Karen Ward09/02/05
Well done, I especially liked the rhythm of the poem. Creative look at luggage too, I really enjoy your Bible based pieces! God Bless, Karen
Monika Langguth01/21/06
i THINK THIS IS AN EXCELLENT PIECE OF POETRY. THANK YOU.