The Official Writing Challenge
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Well done, well said. A universal message!
This is so true. ANother song comes to mind, "What the World Needs Now, is Love Sweet Love..." Good work.
11/09/09
Very well done!

Since you asked for specific suggestions, I'd offer these two: most devotionals will hold readers' attention better with personal anecdotes included, and your paragraphs might be broken down into smaller, more easily digestible bites.

I can't find a thing to fault with either your content or your writing ability--this is a strong entry.
11/09/09
Your writing captivates. I love the personification in the beginning, and the paragraph of all of the colors we can paint on God's canvas.

You have a few misused and missing commas and a couple of incomplete sentences, but they don't distract from your beautiful message. Nice work!
11/10/09
Very well done! I loved all the color illustrations.

I think breaking it down to shorter paragraphs would make it a bit easier to read, but overall it was great. Excellent message!
11/11/09
Very well written! This kept my interest from beginning to end. I agree with a couple of the reviewers that to break up your paragraphs might be a good idea and there are some misuse of commas and/or deletion of same. Overall, you have done a superb job! Laura
11/11/09
Your colorful descriptions are so grand! I love how this is worded, "forever altering the beautiful innocence that displays herself so proudly in the purest splendor of white."
11/11/09
Lots of truth in this sermonette. Yes, we certainly need to look more inward than just the external to reach out to the ones in pain and agony.