The Official Writing Challenge
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11/05/09
I like this. I wanted Ryan to win. This sounded very realistic. Nice job!
I loved the story--it so took me back to my own childhood, as well as to the squabbling of my son and daughter. Good dialogue make the characters real.
11/07/09
This title caught my eye before all the others! Love it. I knew there would be a spill at one point. Very good job telling the story. Now I want a milkshake, but I prefer chocolate myself:)
11/11/09
As one who played Monopoly over and over as a teenager, I enjoyed your slant in this story. Yep, the boys were in trouble! I enjoyed your very realistic dialog in this. You've got talent!
11/11/09
Excellent! I could just hear those two boys fighting, and I was cringing at what was about to happen!

I played Monopoly so much when I was a kid that I had EVERYTHING on every card memorized!
11/12/09
A slice of real life, could have come from my own house some years ago. Keep writing, I think you are a chip off the block! A good chip!
11/12/09
Oh, very good. As the others have said, I could picture this really well. You did a great job creating "word pictures" for your readers.
11/13/09
This was written from experience...right? Well done
11/13/09
Great job, Joseph! I KNEW you could do it! And, to answer your question: no, this doesn't mean you have to enter the Challenge more than once a month- ( ;
11/13/09
Very well written. Looks like you have a good teacher. ;)Cognrats on placing in the top 15 of level 1. WooHoo...I guess we will all wait until next month to see what you come up with next.