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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: White (10/29/09)

TITLE: Afternoon With Gramps
By Terry Atchison
10/30/09


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“Grandpa. What's that noise?”

Cocking his head towards the sky, the old mans' ear filled with the noisy chatter that only geese can produce. “Look towards the lake and you will see, little buddy.” And sure enough, the boy watched as the geese made their water landing, swooshing along across the water.

“Are those ducks, Gramps?”

“Geese, Adrien. They come through here each fall, flying south for the winter.”

The two kept on walking along the park path, passing through a maze of trees which were wearing their autumn colors of golds, reds, and oranges.

“Adrien. Why don't you pick up a few leaves to give to your mom? Find some with different colors and make a leaf bouquet. I'll sit here on this bench and rest for a bit.”

“Okay, Gramps.” And the seven-year-old boy started out on his mission, picking up leaves, then another, then throwing one down to be replaced by a prettier one.

Grandpa sat on the bench, breathing in the crisp, cool autumn air. “What a beautiful day, God. Thank you. I have so much to be thankful for. Each minute is a blessing.”

“Here Gramps!” Adrien was pushing his leaves into his grandfathers' hands.

“Okay Adrien. What color is this one?”

“That one is orange and red, Gramps.”

“And what color is this one?”

“That one is gold and yellow, Gramps.” The patient old man took his time and let the boy tell him each color of the leaves of his bouquet.

Adrien sat next to his grandpa, proudly holding his bouquet of leaves. “Gramps, why is Mrs. Rellek so angry all the time? She is a mean person.” The boy was referring to his older neighbor, who was losing her sight. She had snapped at him a few times for being noisy when he played outside.

“She is not mean, Adrien. She is just an old, frustrated woman who is going blind. Sometimes people are afraid and become angry when they are scared of changes in their lives.”

“You will never be like that, will you, Gramps?”

“Not as long as you are around, little buddy. Time to meet your mom, Adrien. Let's go.”

Walking along the path, as they met people, the old gentleman would pick out a feature and tell his grandson. “Did you smell her perfume? Very expensive, no doubt. That lady is in a hurry. She is clicking her heels like chattering teeth! That man is a huffing and a puffing because he has too much weight.” Adrien liked this game Gramps played.

They arrived at their meeting place. “Here is your mom, Adrien. She has on a wonderful perfume today too.” Mom loved the bouquet of leaves. Grandpa turned down the offer of a ride back home. He preferred to walk back through the park. The three hugged and said their goodbyes.

The old man breathed a big sigh. “Thank you for this nice day, Lord. Life is so beautiful with You.” And the old mans' white cane tapped along the pathway in the park as he headed back home.


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Jase Rosenburg11/05/09
Absolutely loved this!
Marie Fink11/05/09
Excellent walk through the park to a surprise ending. The grandfather shows patience, love, and gratitude. It's fun to be reminded of how thankful we need to be through a heartwarming story.
Laura Manley11/07/09
This was simply lovely. I have a friend who is nearly blind (just in the past three months). It does change a person's perception on things, fear sets in, etc. I was glad to see your "Gramps" so in tune with God giving Him the glory for the lovely day. I suspect he at times thanked Him for the little he could see. Great job.
Trisha R08/28/11
Truly enjoyed this story, and, of course, I had to re-read it again, to appreciate the details more once I realized he was blind! Very well done, Mr. Terry!