The Official Writing Challenge
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10/31/09
What a completely unexpected twist! You completely took me by surprise. Nicely done.
10/31/09
This reads like a crime show script that might be on TV. You kept my interest. Good work.
11/03/09
Interesting story and twist.I caught a missing word near the end, but you found it too I bet! Looking forward to more of your stories.
11/19/09
You set the scene and followed it through beautifully. I never saw the end coming, but "... and several other charges ..." reduced its emotional impact. This is a minor point in the overall context, and I look forward to seeing more of your work. Well done.