The Official Writing Challenge
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10/30/09
This is very well-written with a powerful message. Nicely done!
10/31/09
Powerful reminder of what Christ did for us on the cross. The poem had a good rythym to it. Some of your first lines (and one or two of your third lines)are not complete sentences and shouldn't end with a period, but could end with a comma or possibly no punctuation at all.
11/04/09
i agree with the punctuation noted earlier. good rhythm, though. clear images, nicely related back to everyday things.