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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Green (10/22/09)

TITLE: Color of Love
By Terry Atchison
10/23/09


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The chirping of the birds and the cool breeze across his face, awoke him to a natural splendor that gave him a wonderful peace. Blue sky, an azure blue so pure and limpid, touched onto a horizon of flowers and multicolored trees, carpeting the valley below and the hills on the other side. He was lying on his back, in the deep, cool grass, surrounded by a forest of pastel colored petals, attached to plants that he could not name. Rolling onto his side, he almost touched her body. She was sleeping, right there next to him. He pulled out a strand of grass and lightly passed it over her cheek.

“Who is it?”, she whispered, smiling as she spoke. “Who awakens me from my afternoon nap?” She rolled over to face him. “Hey baby. I was just dreaming about you.” Then she pulled his head towards her and kissed him slowly, deliberately, letting him feel the love that she felt for him.

“Wow! I'm going to have to come here more often!” As he said this, he realized that he had no idea where he was at. All he knew was that this place was the most beautiful place he had ever been to in his life. His wife kissed him again and again.

“Honey. Where are we?” Exotic birds of all colors, with strange looking feathers, flew overhead. “What are those buildings down there and on those hills? They look enormous!” He was standing now and his field of vision included a river and a lake. A blue lake filled, it seemed, with small boats and people enjoying this bright, warm day. Then he realized that he could not see the sun. “Where is the sun? Where are we?”

His wife placed her fingertips onto his lips. “It doesn't matter. Nothing matters. Enjoy this time we have together. Soon, you must leave me. But you will return someday, my love.” She was looking at him with her big, emerald colored eyes, that always made him tremble. She was so beautiful.

“Leave? Return someday?” He was feeling very tired, very weak.

“Look at me, my love.” She held him close and kissed him again, all the while looking into his eyes.

He felt a sensation that he was falling. The brightness was dimming. He eyes were fading. All the images faded away into darkness.

“Nurse. Make sure that someone is here when he wakes up. He is a very lucky man. We almost lost him. I still don't understand how we got him back.” With that, the doctor left the room.

The nurse looked down on the small table next to the hospital bed and saw a picture of the man and his wife. She had been killed in an auto accident two years before. She was a devout Christian and well known in the city. Her green eyes sparkled in the photo.


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SherylAnn Heinicka10/30/09
Leave off the "at" at the end of your sentence in the third paragraph. It is not needed.

Great story. You reeled me in and made me curious about where you were headed.

I think the story could have done without the last paragraph. For me, it would have been good to just trail it off at the end of the previous paragraph when the doctor leaves...
Marie Fink10/31/09
This is a very touching story of what a strong abiding love could possibly do for someone. Good job.
Mark Bell11/01/09
good story of what people have said they experienced after accidents or other traumas. well developed. great dialogue. nicely done.