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10/26/09
Interesting plot! You showed the conflict and emotions well. Keep up the good writing.
10/27/09
Church conflicts are so heartbreaking!

I wasn't clear on what the Beaver's Club was, or how it realated to some of the other conflicts and people. Just a little tightening up of the middle section might clarify that.

Good story--keep writing!
So-called "outreach" and 25 years of commitment with a secular community "Club" for a huge amount of money doesn't look promising for the Church of Jesus Christ...it's indeed a compromise. Whatever business agenda they, "the Club" and the church might have, doesn't look right as the church of Christ-- as a witness in the community.

Thankfully, Bently listened to the promptings of GOD.
You have hit the nail on the head with your story, so many churches these days are willing to compromise the truth for convenience.

I enjoyed your story. So glad that the Pastor saw the Light and acted on it.