The Official Writing Challenge
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10/27/09
This story was interesting. There are some good lessons to be learned nestled inside. There are some misused words. Would help to have someone edit your work. Interesting story. Glad a way out was found:)
10/27/09
This story was interesting. There are some good lessons to be learned nestled inside. There are some misused words. Would help to have someone edit your work. Interesting story. Glad a way out was found:)
10/27/09
I could feel the fear,the ultra blackness of the cave.
Could even be symbolic of the search for true Light. Minor problems.Otherwise keep it up!
A great description of the "dark cave of isolation" we ALL find ourselves in from time to time, whether it be for brief stays...or for longer durations. I, too, felt the cave dweller's misery, fear, longing for light and a way out. A few technical problems, and I do agree - it helps to have someone else give it the once-over. Wording, verb tenses, etc. are a snap to learn. It's a great heart that makes for great writing, and you have that in this piece. I hope you continue to submit your work.
10/28/09
Great allegory!
10/28/09
Many live in caves of isolation in the form of one fear or another. God is good to reveal them in his way and timing. Good story.