The Official Writing Challenge
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10/26/09
I suspected what was happening in your intriguing story and really felt for your MCs! You did a good job with the topic in very subtle way! :)
10/26/09
Well written. This could be developed to a good novel. Hint hint!
10/27/09
Stuggles such as what you have described are painful and real. Hopefully, there will be a day...as you say.
10/28/09
Good story--almost a modern-day Romeo and Juliet.

A few suggestions: An extra space (by hitting "enter") for each new paragraph, including one for each new speaker. And you're encouraged not to use the topic as a title.

You're right--maybe some day...
10/31/09
this was a great idea for this topic and nicely written well done!