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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Black (10/15/09)

TITLE: Soul Full
By Dimple Suit
10/16/09


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Soul-Full

Black was every moment filling me with despair
Black was every thought that no one would care
Black was my movements without a loving light
Black was my actions, weighted with my fright

Black was my night without moon or stars
Black was my entire life full of painful scars
Black was the band squeezing out a scream
Black was the face I saw in every dream

Black was the road I blindly faced each day
Black was the sound before I learned to pray
Black was the scowl putting wrinkles on my face
Black was my words before I found your grace

Black was my world without your cleansing light
Black was my direction until you gave me sight
Black was my past, my present, and eternity
Black was my soul before you set me free


Light is my thoughts for pain is washed away
Light is my step as I move through each day
Light is my burden for you took it all from me
Light is my sight for now your grace I see

Light is every song placing joy in my heart
Light is a beginning, a clean slate, a new start
Light is a night with my dreams full of peace
Light is shining in me with this sweet release

Light is my forgiveness from the blood you shed
Light is the future for hope is no longer dead
Light is the power filling me with holy fire
Light is the love that lifts me ever higher

Light is my soul for you hold it in your hand
Light is my guide, the rock on which I stand
Light is my direction, one I lift for all to see
Light is what I speak of in your love for me


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Laury Hubrich 10/23/09
Nice title - your soul was full either way - either with blackness or light. Very good.
ISAAC LIKUJI10/23/09
Should I add: Black was my life hellward, till the Light of CHRIST directed me heavenward!

A very good thought you presented. Isaac

ISAAC LIKUJI10/23/09
Should I add: Black was my life hellward, till the Light of CHRIST directed me heavenward!

A very good thought you presented here.
Isaac

Dolores Stohler10/24/09
The verses here are beautiful but I have one suggestion: instead of repeating the words black and light so often, it would read better if you would use the words black and light for just the first word of each stanza. Then the next line could read, for instance: it is the..., and the third line you would just leave off the word black or light. But very well written over all.
Marie Fink10/24/09
Contrasts are very powerful in poetry and writing.
Mark Bell10/27/09
very good contrasting imagery. maybe it was my expectation, rather than what would be better, but the thought i had was matching the subject matter of each stanza of black with the corresponding stanza of light. either way, good job.
Jan Ackerson 10/27/09
Good contrasts here, and I appreciate your testimony.

A little repetition is a good thing, but there may be a bit too much here.

Thanks for submitting this heartfelt poem!