The Official Writing Challenge
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10/23/09
Nice title - your soul was full either way - either with blackness or light. Very good.
10/23/09
Should I add: Black was my life hellward, till the Light of CHRIST directed me heavenward!

A very good thought you presented. Isaac

10/23/09
Should I add: Black was my life hellward, till the Light of CHRIST directed me heavenward!

A very good thought you presented here.
Isaac

The verses here are beautiful but I have one suggestion: instead of repeating the words black and light so often, it would read better if you would use the words black and light for just the first word of each stanza. Then the next line could read, for instance: it is the..., and the third line you would just leave off the word black or light. But very well written over all.
10/24/09
Contrasts are very powerful in poetry and writing.
10/27/09
very good contrasting imagery. maybe it was my expectation, rather than what would be better, but the thought i had was matching the subject matter of each stanza of black with the corresponding stanza of light. either way, good job.
10/27/09
Good contrasts here, and I appreciate your testimony.

A little repetition is a good thing, but there may be a bit too much here.

Thanks for submitting this heartfelt poem!