The Official Writing Challenge
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10/20/09
This is lovely. Nice imagery.
10/21/09
an interesting one!. Are the two pairs of blue eyes those of Jesus and his mother in a picture?
Some very good thoughts and phrases in her. Your rhyming scheme and line lengths are rather variable which makes the poem a little uneven. I sometimes find that if I read the peice out loud I can see where things need changing.Keep working on it , poetry is an art!