The Official Writing Challenge
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10/17/09
This is a good story about sometimes not realizing the intentions behind our parents' (or others') actions.
10/18/09
Great last line. Well done.
10/21/09
Very true and a good message!

I think you probably could sharpen your message by leaving out the fashion issues and comments. It didn't seem to quite fit with the more important elements of the story.

Keep writing, we do get better with each entry (most of the time lol)!
This is touching. The mother put her heart into making the clothes, and I think you got that across. There are a few grammatical glitches, but nothing major. Overall, nicely done. Keep writing.