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10/16/09
This is a story from the heart. Your writing reveals a wonan who proved to be an anchor of goodness. The simple pleasures and rituals and the baby in the drawer were so real; so family! Then she cut you free to live your own life by indicating in the sweetest way- 'I'm out of here darling heart, as soon as the Lord comes to get me.'P.S. I hope to meet her one day too. If she is real.
Wow, what a touching story. Great story writing. It really kept my attention and brought me into who this great woman was. I'd love to meet her too. She sounds like an awesome woman of God.
10/18/09
I really like this story. It touches something deep where my memories of my grandmothers live. So descriptive I actually smelled the peach cobbler cooking and saw your brother in the dresser drawer. That is something I too have experienced in the long ago. Thanks for sharing.
10/19/09
ahh how lovely . I enjoyed reading this story
Your story held me from start to finish. You "painted" some beautiful word pictures.

The editor in me wanted to correct a few things & put all the "peach" sentences together in one paragraph. That could have been a formatting issue that didn't translate well in the submission process.
10/19/09
This line was such a simple way to put something so wonderful! "We lay there talking about Jesus and how much He loved us."
Loved the descriptions and beauty of the message. Good job!
10/27/09
Your descriptions of your grandma's greetings and her house brought me back to my grandma's house. I aspire to be such a woman in the eyes of my grandchildren one day. Good job.