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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Sightseeing (08/08/05)

TITLE: The Tourists
By Stacey Reed
08/15/05


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A woman is standing, looking around, and enjoying the scenery, while obviously waiting on someone.
“Where is she?” She looks down at her watch, only to see her arm and remember that her watch hasn’t worked in a long time. So, she doesn’t wear it anymore. She looks around once more and sees her friend rushing toward her. She sighs, smiles and rushes to go hug her friend.
“Dana! I’ve been waiting for you.”
“I know, Sharisse.”
“I’m so happy to see you.”
“I’m happy to see you, too.”
“It’s been a long time since I’ve seen you last. How long has it been?”
“Too long, but I’m here now. What do we do next?”
“Well, I have heard so much about this place that I really wanted to just go all around and see what it has to offer.”
“What have you seen so far?”
“I’ve been waiting on you. I wanted us to see it together.”
“Oh, that is so sweet. You are the best friend a girl could have.”
“Save the mushy stuff! We have things to do and this whole place to see. So, let’s get started.”
“Do you have a map?”
“A map?”
“Yeah, one of those things that says ‘you are here and this is where you go next.’? It’s been around a while and I heard it was a wonderful invention,”
“Ha! Ha! Very funny! No, I don’t have one, but maybe we can get one though.” She looks around for a display of some sort through the flow of people moving back and forth. She sees one man standing with his back to her, wearing what seems to be some kind of uniform, because he looks very official. She taps her friend and nods towards him.
“Maybe he knows.”
“It wouldn’t hurt to ask.”
“I guess you’re right…Come on.” They both walk over to him and pause, looking at each other and thinking the same thing. ‘He didn’t look this tall from over there.’ She taps him on the back and says
“Excuse me, Sir.” He turns around and she gasps. His face was radiant, beautiful, and yet very familiar.
“Yes? May I help you?” She doesn’t say anything, so he smiles and asks again
“May I be of some help to you?” She gets herself together and speaks
“I wanted to ask if you know where I could get a map to help us in our sightseeing of this beautiful place.”
“There are no maps.”
“How are we supposed to know our way around?”
“Just walk around, enjoy the sights and you’ll end up where you’re supposed to be.”
“Okay, thank you.” They walk away, looking around and then she stops and looks at her friend
“Did he look familiar to you?”
“Yeah, but he probably had one of those faces.”
“Maybe you’re right.”
“Meanwhile have you looked at these streets?”
“I’ve never seen streets like these before.”
“Yeah, they’re more beautiful than the streets of Venice. I mean, I’ve never been there, but I’ve heard things.”
“Look at these walls.” She says in awe, they touch the wall
“What do you think it’s made of?” Someone walking past them answers
“It’s made of pure Jasper.”
“How do you know?”
“I know because I asked.”
“Okay, let me ask you…The streets, the gates?”
“Made of Gold and Pearl.”
“Wow!!! Thank you.”
“You’re welcome.” He leaves
“This place just keeps getting better.”
“Look over there…those are the Palaces and Mansions we’ve heard so much about.”
“Yes, and there’s a very large one right in the center. Let’s go see.” They walk toward the large central palace and as they get closer they hear sounds of continual worship and it is then the reality hits them. They’re really here. The door opens and they are over taken and begin to worship God along with the Angels by His throne. God smiles with His radiant and beautiful face and says
“I’m glad you decided to come for a visit…I’ve been waiting on you. What have you been doing?”
“We’ve been sightseeing.”
“Do you have some time to sit and talk with me?”
“Abba Father…We have an eternity.”


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dub W08/15/05
Yeah. This is good, albeit a little predictable. Tighten the dialog a bit and this is a number 1 choice.
Shari Armstrong 08/18/05
Nicely done, but I kind of lost track of who was saying what. Good descriptions.
Julianne Jones08/22/05
Very descriptive. Have you thought of turning this into a skit? I think it could work very well and may even have more impact. Just a thought. Keep writing!