The Official Writing Challenge
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10/15/09
Interesting. This sounds like it could be in the middle of a longer story. Good building to the prize.
10/17/09
This is a good story, and you have some great description. I think it could have been an even better story if you had expanded it a little more.
10/19/09
this is lovely very descriptive thank you!