The Official Writing Challenge
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10/15/09
I like your use of metaphor, "fruits dripping with honey, colors, texture of cashmere," etc. Double click at end of paragraph and you will get a space between your paragraphs. I just learned that myself a few days ago.
10/19/09
what a lovely peice of writing with lots of rich description and written with a tenderness and love for your grandfather!
Yes like the other commenter has already said, if you space your work it is so much easier to read. Look at other entries to see what we mean. That is easily changed and I think you will soon be up with the winners with the quality of your writing!