The Official Writing Challenge
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VERY well written! Love the name of your protagonist, the open ending, and the light tone. Excellent story for teens, and one of my favorites on this level.
You have accurately captured the feelings of a teenage girl. I really enjoyed reading this story.
Well written. Good job.
This brought back memories of some of those church camp bus rides. I very good story that would be good for youth to read. Congratulations on the Highly Commended placement.
LOL What a cute story! I well remember the crushes of my youth, thinking I'd die if "he" didn't ask me out.

You've got some great description going on here. I especially liked how the lurching bus broke the invisible barrier. Thought that was well done.

Congratulations on your high ranking. Good job. :0)
So glad this story got the recognition it deserves. Congratulations. I truly enjoyed getting to know your MC through your "showing" words and descriptive phrases. Excellent writing.