The Official Writing Challenge
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A very good lesson in making assumpitions.
Very nice slant on the topic. I would have liked to have known who the tour guide was but your descriptions were right on. For easier reading in the future try putting a little space between paragraphs. It is easier on the eyes. This is an excellent first entry.
Good start! Tighten it up and I agree with the spaces. Can't wait to read more of your work!
Very original take on the topic of sightseeing. Spaces between paragraphs, and watch your run-on sentences.
Nice slant on sightseeing. You had some powerful sentences and I really enjoyed this piece. I agree with dividing it up and hitting "Enter" when you "enter" with a new thought. Read some of the advanced challenge entries to get a feel for what we mean.

Keep writing and developing your talent!