The Official Writing Challenge
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I just have to say I absolutely LOVED the last words. They are really powerful. "As you learn to be a man, you learn to be a child." Brilliant. =)
09/12/09
Very nice! Simple, but very real message.
I like the reminder to trust God like a child.
The rhythm faltered in a very few places, which may have been haste to submit, but if not, I would be happy to brainstorm possible adjustments, if your review of my own poetry would have you inclined to do so.
I can imagine little greater joy than having the opportunity to observe my children passing on to their children something I got right in parenting.
Cool! I am so excited for you!
09/17/09
This poem was a wonderful read. I thoroughly enjoyed it. Congratulations on your first place win for your level.
09/17/09
Great work and congratualtions on your first place ranking. I found this poem to be tender, great in the rhyme and meter department, and loved that the father's words of wisdom spanned the generations. Keep up the great work.
Wow! I guess that answers my question! You're great at poetry! Any tips? I have to get private messenger today...not sure if you emailed me regarding poetry before...I asked you if you wrote any.

Machele--You're great at it!