The Official Writing Challenge
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I liked this story, but I did want to point out one thing that irked me. This is just my opinion, but I can't really imagine a four year old saying the following sentence. "Grabbing my grandfather by the hand, I look up at Mary and tell to put her pad away and that her and her ice cream tie-dyed apron can move on to the next booth, were leaving." Just my 2 cents.
09/16/09
Good but sad story. The four year old sounds a bit too mature. Keep writing.
09/16/09
I liked how you let us in on the thinking of the 4 year old. His thinking "lost" meant "couldn't find" was a good touch. I also agree with the others that what the 4 year old said didn't fit the age of the character. Thanks for sharing this touching story with us.