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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Childhood (09/03/09)

TITLE: CHILD (in the) HOOD
By Lliam Tallon
09/09/09


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I woke up this morning and got out of my bed
I ran to the bathroom while scratching my head.

Mom yelled up the stairs “hurry or you’ll be late for the bus”
I got 10 minutes there’s no need to fuss.

“Did you finish all your homework is it all done”?
I’ll do it on the bus its not due till period one.

“Ok honey here’s your lunch with an apple inside”
Great if the guys see that at lunch I’ll wish I had died…

The bus honked its horn and I ran outside
Hopped on my big yellow limo and took a ride

As the bus pulled up to school and I looked to the right
I saw a big circle that meant a fight

I looked out to the left and what did I see
Was the pack of bullies walking over toward me!

Oh great there’s those bullies right where my bus is gonna stop
As I ran off the bus they tripped me and I fell with a plop…

I fell right on my lunch while my books were in the air
Now that apple is in my chest, and my books are everywhere.

Now they are all laughing & everyone’s looking at me
I should have stayed on the bus, my knees do agree.

Just then the words I read with my Mom
Last night in my head I do hear…
“Ye though I walk through the valley of the shadow of death
I shall have no fear”…

As I got up I started laughing and looked each one in the eye
Man what’s wrong with this kid is he crazy said one guy.

I felt the Holy Spirit and no longer had any fear
I reached into my bag and tossed them the apple
And said to them “here”

Well one guy caught it but it broke all apart
And splashed the biggest one of them…
And he punched him and said “real smart”

As I left they started fighting between each other
Man I can’t wait to get home
And read more of The Bible with my Mother…

Child hood is a time for nurturing not only with food and love
But it’s also a time to spiritually nurture with the Holy Spirit
GOD’S law and the teachings of JESUS CHRIST
Turn child hood into child good…


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Yvonne Blake 09/14/09
A narrative poem! I liked the building of the plot.
Pay attention to your spelling and punctuation. Also, try to make your lines similiar in rhythm.
Keep Writing!
Lliam Tallon 09/15/09
The punctuation is conducive to “hood” or impoverished area, where I grew up in Paterson, NJ. more so… cuss words are more indigenous to the area but I thought it not suiting…not only is the poem a narrative, but in fact a true story that happened I my life… Thank you for your comment, it helps with my work, please review my other poems and critique for as well…GOD BLESS Lliam