The Official Writing Challenge
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09/14/09
A narrative poem! I liked the building of the plot.
Pay attention to your spelling and punctuation. Also, try to make your lines similiar in rhythm.
Keep Writing!
09/15/09
The punctuation is conducive to “hood” or impoverished area, where I grew up in Paterson, NJ. more so… cuss words are more indigenous to the area but I thought it not suiting…not only is the poem a narrative, but in fact a true story that happened I my life… Thank you for your comment, it helps with my work, please review my other poems and critique for as well…GOD BLESS Lliam