The Official Writing Challenge
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09/10/09
LOL...that was so cute.
09/11/09
You built the tension until I was searching the crowd too. I loved the sea of legs description
Many parents can identify with this stomach-clinching situation.
It was somewhat challenging to follow, since you switched back and forth between Ruthie's first-person perspective, and the omniscient narrator telling what her parents were experiencing. It can be complicated to mix perspectives in such a short story, but perhaps a cue for the transitions would help, such as a few asterisks or dashes.
I always like a happy ending!
09/17/09
Having been lost as a child, and having lost one of my children... I could totally identify with all of your characters. I do agree with the comment about making some distinctions between your POV's.