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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Birth (infancy) (08/20/09)

TITLE: Push it
By williams Strong


Dr. Heart came in and closed the door behind him. “The nurses are ready, the lights are on and all the operation tools are set displayed in trays like in an exhibition. Dr.Smart and Dr.Strong are already in high spirit ready for another round. But the nurses, it’s just the usual thing. They’re all waiting for me, I, little Dr. Heart. It’s going to be a good day. Help father, Amen.”
“Oh! Ah! Ash!” Hanatu cried out in pain in fear and in pain. “I dislike working with Dr. Heart, his too radical.” Heart looked at Hanatu and pose for a while, “Sciscerian cancel. She can push it out.” Dr. whispered. “But the possibility of survival is 40% not enough for a normal birth.” Dr.Smart cut in. “Yes, I agree with him,” Strong complemented.
Quietly, Dr.Heart walked to her ears and whispered, “Push it, you can do it.” Hanatu began to cry. The nurses were already lost. “No I can’t do it. It’s painful! Suddenly the pain increased, she waddled her legs up and dangled her hands down, as she give it a trial.Fear,tears and the groan together seized the atmosphere except Dr.Heart. “One more time. Just this time. Push it, yes is coming out.” “But nothing is coming out Dr.” Dr.Smart to Dr.Strong.Dr. Heart overhead the whispered but said nothing. He’s a crazy doctor, not scared of loosing life.” Dr.Smart whispered to Dr.Strong. “I’m sure he’s not a Christian that is why he’s so…”
“Come on Strong, what the hell are you looking at.” Heart commanded. “She’s loosing blood,” Dr. Smart shouted. “Yes, because you are not doing your job.” Heart responded.
“Yak! The child is coming out!” Claudia shouted. “Hey! But, you shouldn’t react like a professional comedian. You are a professional nurse. “She is losing more blood now.” “The child is coming out.” “What if she dies?” “Her will not. Just do your bloody job Dr.Smart and push that trash out of you.” Dr.Heart Yell out.
“Oh, ah, yea, yea, oh! Mmmm,” “Push, push, yes is out.” “God help me, God help me. Noo! Hanatu groan as she pushes the child out, but with tongs of blood flooding.
“Yes!”They all yell in celebration. “Congratulation.” Dr.Smart said to Hanatu.
But Hanatu did not respond. She wings her eyes to and fro, up and down and finally gave up.Suddenlly, the theater became like a grave yard. “I said it. Now she’s gone.” “What hell are you talking about, that I’m responsible! Besides, she’s not dead. She’s sleeping.” Heart whispered into his ears and took his leave.
Suddenly, Hanatu came back to life. Strong and energetic. Silence again stroke in.
Hanatu looked at her handsome bouncing baby and feel the touch of how healthy she was, she smiled. With Like a tax giver to a tax collector she said to, “Dr.Smart, I’m glad you care so much safety.” “Yes, to save life is my first priority.”Dr.Smart who came for his round responded.
“You know, every human is born great. But most often, we never attend it because we are periodically or succesionally misdirected by our priority, beaten down by our fears, soaked and drawn in our mistakes.Delapidated by our weaknesses and finally crippled by our negative attitude. They are like people, like enemies barricading our progress and attainment. However, there is someone by our side, who speak to us cheering us up in very simple ways that most often we ignore and can’t see and understand. You are a good doctor. But Dr.Heart is great.”
Joe Sat directly opposite his mum, disintegrating and assimilating the food one after the other.
“That was what I said to him, thirty minutes after given birth to you. So, don’t worry how the cheated you. Push that unforgiveness out and move on. I know it’s painful but just push it out you. Life is full of road blocks. Approach it like Dr.Heart and like your mother ok.”Hanatu pose and suddenly began to cry. “How I wish your father was alive.” Quickly Joe responded. “Hey mum, you don’t need to do this now. I Promise you, I will take good care of you. Just push this out, and the pain will be over.” When Hanatu saw the zeal and passion with which Joe comforts her, she became convinced that he has learned from her life sorry. With her scarf, she cleaned her crocodile tears.

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Yvonne Blake 08/28/09
Wow...what an emotional scene! I like how you used dialogue throughout it. I suggest that you don't try to use big words, but just simple easy words that people speak everyday.
Keep writing.
Gregory Kane09/02/09
There's certainly a lot of interaction here. It will help you as a writer to ask someone else to proof read your work before you submit it. That way you can catch a lot of mistakes in good time.
As a general rule FaithWriters is meant to be family friendly. There's quite a lot of swearing in your story and such expletives aren't appropriate.