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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Birth (infancy) (08/20/09)

TITLE: Reaching the Light
By Rachel Barclay
08/24/09


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My world has grown so much smaller. No room left for stretching out. I've been in this same, upside-downish position for a long time now. It's soft and warm in here. All I know is safety.

Wait! What's going on? The walls are collapsing in. Oh, it's gone now. I've got my space back. I hope that doesn't happen again. A bit constricting.

Well that wasn't long. It's happening again! I'll see if I can push against it. I don't want my space taken. I don't think I'm strong enough. That collapse was longer than the last one. I'm sure it's time for a nap. That zooming sound is happening where it feels like I'm riding. It always sends me to sleep. It's going pretty fast this time though.

I can't believe this. I always fall asleep with the zooming sound. This collapsing thing is just unfair. It's starting to squash me a bit, and it gets longer and longer each time. When will it stop?

Oh, my! there's nice colours in front of me. I've never 'seen' before. It's always been dark in my little, shrinking home. But it's always been comfortable.

I feel like I'm moving. It's really tight in this part. All the warm stuff has flushed away. I'm sliding down towards that light stuff. The darkness is nearly completely gone.

Absolutely no room for kicking here. I do hope my exercise room comes back. I can hear a strange noise as I come into this cold place, but at least the tightness has gone. But it doesn't feel so safe here. My top part is hurting a fair bit. Suddenly I'm making the same noise as what I heard before. It's all so scary.

I feel like I'm being watched. Like this person is doing to me what I'm doing to her. But there's puddly things coming from those small kind shapes that never move away from me. Everything else is so big. Maybe somewhere in there I'll find that warm safety again.

This is fantastic! I was right. There's the safe feeling again. It's a bit different. And there's this wind feeling going in and out of me. Now it's being swapped with warm wetness. It's going right down inside me. It feels so good! It takes the ache away down low. I have to work a bit to get it down, but at the start, it's an incredible sensation. I could do this all the time.

This new home is a bit scary, but it has so many good things that I could never give up. And to get them, all I have to do is make that noise again that I first heard when I reached the light. Sometimes that loving lady doesn't come for a really long time. I wonder if there is someone really big here who will always keep me safe?


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Edmond Ng 08/31/09
Interesting approach to this topic, seeing things from the infant's POV. Very imaginative piece of work.