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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Birth (infancy) (08/20/09)

TITLE: DON'T LAUGH AT ME
By DANIEL OMAGWU
08/21/09


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Don’t laugh at me yet because it has not come
Have you not read? “Though it might delay it will surely come”
Even she laughed at herself because she past child birth
But God did it - the joy of new “Birth”
Don’t laugh at me because you think is not to your taste
Have you not read? “All good and perfect gifts comes from him” It is the lord‘s doing and is marvelous in my sight.
Don’t laugh at me because it just started
Have you not read? “Don’t despise the days of little beginnings”
Who will have thought a child will come? But now Isaac, then two nations
Then twelve and now are we not all his children? Is the small that makes the big
A seed made two nations now the stars in the sky are what his children are.

Don’t laugh at me because you think is weak have you not read?
“Out of weakness came forth strength”.
Don’t laugh at me don’t you know am an over comer? have you not read? ” Whatever is born of God overcomes the world”
Everything that exists but God was born: Christ? The world itself?
Am proud to be born AGAIN and born of GOD.
Are you still laughing?


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Faithful Okoye08/27/09
This is a really nice idea and poem. The only problem is that it has few typos and not a very good structure. If you had brought a sentence down, you know, like a normal poem, it would have looked a lot more aethestic.
Like
Looking at the blue skies,
I see it wonder by
Could i be so blind
To consider the beauty that lies behind...

Making them looking structure would give a lot of beef to your poem.

But that was very creative...and some phrases- powerful...

So keep writing, but keep in mind, appearance is important, and very powerful.

Good luck.
Verna Mull08/27/09
I agree with Faithful Okoye. Some great thoughts, a good theme, but needs a little cleaning up. Why don't you work on it and put it on critique circle? You could get more help on there!


   
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