The Official Writing Challenge
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08/20/09
Tragic, and happening all around us. I could feel the emotion behind the message.

Pam Ford Davis
08/22/09
This story kept the reader interested from the first word until the last. Double spacing between paragraphs will make it much easier to read. Also, look back - I saw a couple places where you have missed a word in a sentence, or used another word instead of the one I think you meant. Spell check is great, but it won't show you that. Good job. Blessings, Laura
08/23/09
I forgot to point out something this morning. I noted that only once in your story do you speak with a southern accent. You refer to "yall." I think if you are going to have the reader make notice of the accent of you or your sister characters, then I think you should make it consistent and indicate it throughout the story. I think that's all now. I'll leave you alone now and will go to my room. I think your story line was excellent. And remember, these are only ideas and/or suggestions. Blessings, Laura