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08/15/05
Wow! Excellent story. It tugged at my heart in more ways than one.
08/17/05
A beautifully told story.
08/18/05
I like this story - lots of emotions - the pain so many of us experience and the hope of a brighter future. Thanks for sharing!
08/19/05
This is a beautiful, well told, story Lauren. You had my attention from the word go. I love the contrast between the woman and her deceased fiancÚ. (My husband helps me enjoy the scenery, too) so true, also, how the bitterness fades when we pray for others. As we know it is written from our characters point of view you can save words by not saying I decided or I thought. Loved it! Well done.
08/19/05
Very poignant and lovely. Good lesson. Emotions came through well. Good reader identification.
08/20/05
I love the concept of prayer melting away bitterness. Very true, and well-written.
08/20/05
This story is well-written and had a poignant message. Good job!! =)
I liked the creativity of this story and the message of hope in the midst of grief. I would have liked to see more action verbs describing the eating place and the statue instead of using "was" as your verb. More like you wrote in the first paragraph.
Good story. I like how she took her problem to the Lord and let Him help melt her bitterness. The only way to become unselfish and unself-centered is to put our focus on others, and prayer is a way to help. Thanks for reminding us of that in your story.
An enjoyable read. Well done!
08/22/05
This was a wonderful story from beginning to end. Very heart-felt, and emotional, yet betwixt and between a very awesome message of God's love woven throughout. Thank you for sharing. God bless ya, littlelight