The Official Writing Challenge
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08/22/09

What an endearing story! Nicely crafted. Sounds real too. It's good to stroll down memory lane, isn't it?!

I liked the tenderness you show in the MC. Does the ending imply that he died?
"Then settling himself in the chair Ted slipped from winter into springtime." A delicate move.

Bone up on your grammar skills; lots of double quote errors. Keep writing and editing; you're on your way!




08/25/09
Wow...you put a lot of information in a short story! Perhaps it would have been stronger to pick one or two points and develop them.
Keep writing.