The Official Writing Challenge
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08/06/09
Your writing expressed the girl's feelings very well.
(I assumed Eric and Paul are the same guy?)
08/07/09
I was wondering all the way through what the blue line was - guess that comes from being male!
What a demeaning way to have your first sexual experience - in some dark, uncomfortable corner of a noisy nightclub with a man who saw you as nothing more than a piece of meat. Vividly expressed.
08/10/09
Ok, the meaning behind your title is intriguing and the resulting discovery satisfying, but what a captivatingly descriptive story! My only disappointment is that the rapid succession of unfolding of events concluded far too abruptly [shackled by the 750 stop sign, I understand]. Aimee, like her author, is someone we certainly hope finds further future creative expression. Bryan. 10Aug09Mon.